Shadow Fall part the first

this is a story that i had in my head for awhile...i was going to make it into a manga but i got a little lazy and so started writing it in this format instead, not that it's easy now...writers' block, but here it is....i might do some chara profiles later, might not....*shrugs* it's kind of dark but it doesn't go too far....if it does i'll have to post it somewhere else.... anyways if you care to venture into reading it then be my guest....feedback is more than welcome..... enjoy