"In my head, though, I was praying; first for forgiveness of my foul mouth, and then that I'd get out of this safely."
I don't know why, but that line cracked me up hardcore. I mean, I really, truly have no idea why. It's just great for some reason. :'D
That was a really good idea, basing the story off your own fear. The dog sounds kind of like mine, actually. . .he's still a puppy and in his excitedly running around and biting things phase. xD
I like that you took inspiration from yourself and from a real location to add to your story; that sort of technique always makes the story seem more tangible, y'know?
Aside from a few occasional tense changes, I thought it was well-written and very good. :3
Kazamas-Keyblade
Otaku Legend | Posted 08/17/13 | Reply
@MashMadness:
Glad you enjoyed it.
MashMadness
Otaku Eternal | Posted 08/17/13 | Reply
"In my head, though, I was praying; first for forgiveness of my foul mouth, and then that I'd get out of this safely."
I don't know why, but that line cracked me up hardcore. I mean, I really, truly have no idea why. It's just great for some reason. :'D
That was a really good idea, basing the story off your own fear. The dog sounds kind of like mine, actually. . .he's still a puppy and in his excitedly running around and biting things phase. xD
Kazamas-Keyblade
Otaku Legend | Posted 08/14/13 | Reply
@WyvernWings:
Whoo, good, cause I scrapped that up.
WyvernWings
Otaku Legend | Posted 08/14/13 | Reply
I like that you took inspiration from yourself and from a real location to add to your story; that sort of technique always makes the story seem more tangible, y'know?
Aside from a few occasional tense changes, I thought it was well-written and very good. :3