Ooh, I really like Nai-Hina and Kaki! ^^ Wow, it's really interesting that the both of them refuse to get the operation. What will it mean for them and team if they still have the chips and stuff? O: That's really exciting!
Good job on the post!
Maybe you (the creators) could kind of do a side story character week where you have to write a short (random) story including at least 3 other characters that aren't yours.
You're improving with every post, and I love the description you give. It's so beautiful. <3
But seriously, your writing has just escalated up the scale, and I'm proud :D
My only critique is not the length, but how little interaction you included. But it's not a problem; you did include some, and that's fine. (We all need to work on including as many characters as possible Dx)
WindSorceress32
Otakuite++ | Posted 10/06/13 | Reply
Ooh, I really like Nai-Hina and Kaki! ^^ Wow, it's really interesting that the both of them refuse to get the operation. What will it mean for them and team if they still have the chips and stuff? O: That's really exciting!
Good job on the post!
harvestmoonluvr
HARVEST GODDESS (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 09/17/13 | Reply
I like how Nai appreciated her fellow member's alterations even though they were produced by evil and whatnot :) It's an interesting new perspective.
HellisSinging13
Otakuite+ | Posted 09/17/13 | Reply
Thank you so much for the advice!
Maybe you (the creators) could kind of do a side story character week where you have to write a short (random) story including at least 3 other characters that aren't yours.
Just brainstorming here!
But Seriously, thank you so much!
@WyvernWings
WyvernWings
Otaku Legend | Posted 09/17/13 | Reply
You're improving with every post, and I love the description you give. It's so beautiful. <3
But seriously, your writing has just escalated up the scale, and I'm proud :D
My only critique is not the length, but how little interaction you included. But it's not a problem; you did include some, and that's fine. (We all need to work on including as many characters as possible Dx)
BUT ALL IN ALL, lovely post. :3