How heart warming! It does, however, seem a tad rushed. Would you mind editing it with proper paragragh breaks and make it clear who is speaking? Also, we are not entirely familiar with this anime. Please provide a brief sentence describing what actually happened at the end, so we will know what you changed.
Thank you for entering, and we are both pleased to have read what is obviously a fan fic of a series close to your heart :)
~*Aurora*and*Borealis*~
Last edited by Aurora Borealis at 12:17:32 AM CST on December 10, 2010.
Aurora Borealis
Otaku Legend | Posted 12/10/10 | Reply
How heart warming! It does, however, seem a tad rushed. Would you mind editing it with proper paragragh breaks and make it clear who is speaking? Also, we are not entirely familiar with this anime. Please provide a brief sentence describing what actually happened at the end, so we will know what you changed.
Thank you for entering, and we are both pleased to have read what is obviously a fan fic of a series close to your heart :)
~*Aurora*and*Borealis*~
Last edited by Aurora Borealis at 12:17:32 AM CST on December 10, 2010.