I just read the prologue....he is kinda...mean and evil and stuffs, but I love that in a character!!!

@Kaerlyn:

ha ha ha, yes kapranova is one to think that death is silly, ooooOOooo thanks for reading! I shall start on Chapter One very very soon!

-Avarice-

This part made me giggle.

"I cannot explain why I exist nor can I explain why I do what I do. Perhaps it is just a passion or some unusual hobby like crafts…I like crafts."

Yup. Dark, deadly, have fun with this story!

@Sensei Ryuu:

Oh! So that´s what you meant, ha ha ha...geez you really should stop speaking in riddles, ha ha ha.

-Avarice-

@AvariceTears:

if writing doesnt make you think its not good.

@Sensei Ryuu:

....what? a ha ha ha.

-Avarice-

this one is amazing!
your just so amazing
your writing is awesome

@AvariceTears:

I say writing isnt good if you dont think about it.

@saekimidori:

Ack! No they arent intentional ha ha ha, it just comes out like that, ha ha ha ha, I am glad that you like it! Finally something you like of mine JK!!

-Avarice-

ah i can relate lol[not realy to the murdering stuff ...] i find the last two sentances realy funny and randome lol, i like his murderer mind that he doesent think of her as human ever in the whole thing just like a doll or an angel. and that he feels no remores. very poetic

Hmm, I don't know if it's intentional, but some sentences after the other rhyme. And I like that.
The character sounds interesting... Nice sounding name, too. =)

@AvariceTears:

ahhh yes yes, sorry then^-^ I was only mentioning it because I noticed, but they are things I bet most people won't...it's probably cause I read and write to much?? Well whatever, but it's really very good! You should keep going I want to know more^-^ Seriously, great job...love the style and very nicely done too!

Don't stop writing!

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BAK!! thanks Smexy!

-Avarice-

@Sensei Ryuu:

Aw--thankyou so much my pet slave! That means a lot to me! Ha ha ha. I am happy that you understand my style of writing! Not many people do...I guess it´s because it´s a little different and not so direct, but I like to be a difficult author, ha ha ha.

-Avarice-

@itsumademo:

yeah I´m not really looking for any critism in my writing right now, but I appreciate the fact that you care so much to tell me. I dont know hearing bad things about my writing will just make me...you know not want to finish it. ha ha ha. Like right now I dont want to finish or even start on the first chapter because I feel it isnt good enough...but then again I only wrote it in half an hour during my break, ack!

Thanks for the comment! this is my first time writing in like...4 or 5 years! Ee gak!

-Avarice-

Oh I really love how you are choosing to write this story of yours!

The more distant style causes readers to create a lot more in their minds, always a fun style I think but one I never did well with^-^ I must have detail! Ehehe, well, back to your writing.

I really can't wait for more, I love the character you created and his personality is very interesting...I really like it^-^ Like how he likes crafts. HA, loved that moment, it was very you.

I noticed a few errors, but being as awesome as I am I was able to decipher what you meant^-^ Also I think you could work a bit with spacing since some of your beginning is almost a poetic thought process...you know? Just an idea really, writer to writer! :D

Really very excited to read more!

Wow, you have a great writing style, I like the abstractness of it. And the the way you made the killing passages more literal than the rest says something, says that killing is the only thing that makes him real. Incredible job.

<Pasqua>

@Teapot Domescam:

woah I am so happy that you read my work teapot! ha ha ha, all through out the time I was gone I was hoping that you'd read it! It makes me happy that you read it and actually liked it! Kyah!!

-Avarice-

wow, that was awesome! : O your writing is really good! :o I love how you described all the scene! :o and the story seems interesting!! :D :D :D

and his character is awesome xD he's hillarious :D

just wow :D

I actually think the whole murderer thing at end is really awesome. It makes it seem like he's admitting it to himself, like he's almost satisfied and angry at the same time. Or he's saying it so strongly that it makes him even crazier. This dude is really creepy. The story sends chills all over my spine! But it's really well done, you write like, so good. I'm going to have nightmares!! XD

XOXO

@AvariceTears:

lolXD moster happyXD
awws thank you im glad you would do that fer mehs^^, i miss sooooo maney thing now adays cuzz i hardly get the chanse to come on any more>,<
lol its ok take your time i knoe thee must be busy and junk lol
how the new metal gear??you beat it yet??

Agh! Just a fast side note the word murderer at the end was an accident! ha ha ha, that was just me trying to remember how to spell it! Ack, I forgot it was there...but now that I see it again it kind of places the whole thing together dont ya tink??

-Avarice-

@sasuke uchia:

Wow! Thankyou so much! I am glad to hear that you like my writing, ba gah gah gah ma! ha ha ha. That is my monster happy voice and no worries since you like it so much I will notify you personally when I have written the first chapter! Eep! Have no idea when that is going to be ha ha ha.

But yeah thanks again so much!

-Avarice-

ok so like this is HOT like fasum hot!!!
your writeing is so clean and smooth(sp)
i could actualy see my self reading it as a non graphic novel,reminds me of slight mix between Poe,King and Clive Barker as one.
im looking forward to reading more when you post if i get on in time for my backroom to notify me