I know. It's not one of my best stroies and thanks for the constructive critism (I know I spelled that worng sorry>.<). But maybe he really was a phycopath all along and just itching to kill so when he killed her brother he was all weird (?) and when his wife betrayed him he hated her a lot on killed her? Is that confusing?
Thank you!!! It's greatly appriciated (sorry if I spelled that wrong>.<) that peopkle like this story so much! And I'm honoured that you liked it so much you'd tell it at your Halloween party! Thanks again!
people arnt 4 me
Otakuite+ | Posted 02/11/10 | Reply
tht was good but it was also rele rele creepy good job
Kazumi Saya
Otakuite++ | Posted 11/04/08 | Reply
very good and creative loved it
Keome
Otaku Legend | Posted 10/28/08 | Reply
@Anomaly:
I know. It's not one of my best stroies and thanks for the constructive critism (I know I spelled that worng sorry>.<). But maybe he really was a phycopath all along and just itching to kill so when he killed her brother he was all weird (?) and when his wife betrayed him he hated her a lot on killed her? Is that confusing?
My thoughts create my world
Keome
Otaku Legend | Posted 10/28/08 | Reply
@Madison2294:
Thank you!!! It's greatly appriciated (sorry if I spelled that wrong>.<) that peopkle like this story so much! And I'm honoured that you liked it so much you'd tell it at your Halloween party! Thanks again!
My thoughts create my world
Madison2294
Otaku Legend | Posted 10/28/08 | Reply
Very creepy, I'm gonna tell this one at my Halloween party!! No jokes!!
Anomaly
Internet Champion (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/26/08 | Reply
Too straight-forward and way too easy. Also, it doesn't make sense that he loved his wife because he was all too willing to kill her.
SakuraKatana
Otakuite+ | Posted 10/25/08 | Reply
The part with "murder" in the title immediately caught my eye, and the story didn't disappoint. Nice job! <3