I basically agree with SG here, but I thought it was really cool and unique how you told the poem from Kyon's point of view. I thought it was quite humorous. Nice work!

@Aurora Borealis:

Lol, thanks :D

@SomeGuy:

Yeah, Shin told me I stretched some of the rhymes a little bit xD
I wish I could have fit everything in, but my rhyming ability is little to nothing, so the poem would have been an epic fail if I added any more verses xD
Thanks for the comment :D

@Shinmaru:

I know... It's hard to get the rhyming words correct xD I honestly suck at these types of poems xD

Byeh heh heh heh . . . nice.

For the most part, your rhymes and meters were really good. A few slips broke the rhythm, but no worse for wear. You also did the retelling pretty well - I think one of the issues some people might face will be if people turn these into poems about the characters rather than a poem that retells the story.

I do wish you had a few more of the really big story moments like "The Adventures of Mikuru Asahina", the rock concert, and especially the big "Snow White" moment. The last two were especially important points in the story, and it would have been nice to see those bits.

Still, good times.

Cute poem. I think rhyming "much" with "enough" is a bit of a stretch, but that's a tiny complaint.

@themakita:

LOL you think so? I did the poem off the top of my head xD
Thanks a lot :D

OMFG
that's AWESOME.

it actually revolves around Kyon, without going off track.

AMAZING job ;D