Very creative :) I enjoyed it thoroughly, it's a perfect example of those incredibly annoying Mary-Sues that plague so many of our otherwise interesting fanfictions - and a LOT more of the not-so-interesting ones as well.
Professor Tardis (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
WHOO! KILL THE MARY-SUE! LEAVE NOTHING LEFT OF HER CORPSE! Sorry...Mary-Sue OC's just REALLY piss me off. I have some Naruto OC's...BUT NONE OF THEM ARE MARY-SUE'S! They might seem like it sometimes, but they're not...Why do Mary-Sue's exist anyway?
That was so awesome!XD It was so funny! I love it!X3
I was talking about mary sues a couple of days ago too.XD
I hate having to look at all the sues all the time.-_- it gets really annoying.
I have no problems with OCs as long as they are creative and not like that...girl...
...my oc raine...is not a sue.-_- if ppl say she is i can give like a million reasons why she isnt one...
At times it was kinda hard to tell who was talking though...
Haha, that was hilarious. I think, if this isn't already posted there, it would benefit the authors and readers on FF.Net to read this. >.< Mary Sues are incredibly annoying and I've yet to come across a decent one. (Sadly, or not depending on how you look at it, I'm a shameless yaoi fangirl. I doubt I'll be changing my ways any time soon. XD) This was extremely well-written and I just love how you got pretty much everything wrong in a Mary Sue included in this.
wow - totally random but i laughed quite a lot and completely agree with you! - its rare that i really like a fic with an o.c. - although the best i've read was "Sin's of the past" but the o.c was male and at least it sounded a LOT better than some of those unrealistic female characters that people come up with. Naruto has so many characters anyways i dont see why people need to make o.c's at all. Although I did also read recently a fic where they changed a male character female and had lines like "She was like a goddess of love and beauty....and oversized bust too" - was a real put off. The irony of your story was really hilarious
"That's more unoriginal than the 14 tailed beaver we had to face last week!"
My favorite line!!! XDDDDDDDDDDDDD
Markus Wolfe, you win a dozen internets! But honestly, every OC I've seen has countless justu, bloodline traits, bijuu, blond hair, and huge...womanly assets. What's up with that? When I come up with OCs, I stay away from stereotypes, differ with hair color, and avoid typical character interaction unless extremely necessary. I don't wanna kill the plots as often as they already are... -_-; Great fic. I love it!
TomaKuchiki
Otakuite++ | Posted 10/08/09 | Reply
This is tottally awesome!!! i give it a 10/10!!!
Estheryuki
Grand Otaku | Posted 09/20/09 | Reply
haha this was brilliant xD
KitKatKitty
Otaku Eternal | Posted 07/01/09 | Reply
KILL THE MARY-SUE!
Honestly, Mary-Sues are fun to write about DURING FREE WRITING!! When post on the net stick to good characters!
blackcat1000
Otakuite | Posted 02/15/09 | Reply
Very creative :) I enjoyed it thoroughly, it's a perfect example of those incredibly annoying Mary-Sues that plague so many of our otherwise interesting fanfictions - and a LOT more of the not-so-interesting ones as well.
LoveKouichi
Professor Tardis (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
TheAngelRaine
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/05/08 | Reply
That was so awesome!XD It was so funny! I love it!X3
I was talking about mary sues a couple of days ago too.XD
I hate having to look at all the sues all the time.-_- it gets really annoying.
I have no problems with OCs as long as they are creative and not like that...girl...
...my oc raine...is not a sue.-_- if ppl say she is i can give like a million reasons why she isnt one...
At times it was kinda hard to tell who was talking though...
Great Job!X3
Rai-chan
Slash Fanatic
Otakuite | Posted 08/02/08 | Reply
Haha, that was hilarious. I think, if this isn't already posted there, it would benefit the authors and readers on FF.Net to read this. >.< Mary Sues are incredibly annoying and I've yet to come across a decent one. (Sadly, or not depending on how you look at it, I'm a shameless yaoi fangirl. I doubt I'll be changing my ways any time soon. XD) This was extremely well-written and I just love how you got pretty much everything wrong in a Mary Sue included in this.
15385bic
Lazy Chocobikies (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 08/01/08 | Reply
wow - totally random but i laughed quite a lot and completely agree with you! - its rare that i really like a fic with an o.c. - although the best i've read was "Sin's of the past" but the o.c was male and at least it sounded a LOT better than some of those unrealistic female characters that people come up with. Naruto has so many characters anyways i dont see why people need to make o.c's at all. Although I did also read recently a fic where they changed a male character female and had lines like "She was like a goddess of love and beauty....and oversized bust too" - was a real put off. The irony of your story was really hilarious
fluffy sama fan
Otakuite++ | Posted 07/10/08 | Reply
Whoo! Get that Mary Sue right where it hurts (not sure where that would be, but still)! Very funny, and very much like you!
"KYUUBI TIME!!!!"
"Yes, then it's Kyuubi time." rofl.
I hereby dub thee, "Sir Wolfe, Master of Mary Sue satire"! *hugs* *faves* Once again, very funny fic!
lazyweird1
Grand Otaku | Posted 07/01/08 | Reply
"That's more unoriginal than the 14 tailed beaver we had to face last week!"
My favorite line!!! XDDDDDDDDDDDDD
Markus Wolfe, you win a dozen internets! But honestly, every OC I've seen has countless justu, bloodline traits, bijuu, blond hair, and huge...womanly assets. What's up with that? When I come up with OCs, I stay away from stereotypes, differ with hair color, and avoid typical character interaction unless extremely necessary. I don't wanna kill the plots as often as they already are... -_-; Great fic. I love it!
Markus wolfe
Grand Otaku | Posted 06/22/08 | Reply
Curses! More punctuation mess ups! ARGH! Must complain to Adam!
Well, I should just be glad that my satirical strike to terrible fanfiction has hit home.
Summer Daydream
Mahou Shoujo (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 06/22/08 | Reply
That was HILARIOUS!Please write more!I laughed so hard when I read this!This is the funniest fic I've ever read!Awesome job!
tokyokisshu
Otaku Legend | Posted 06/22/08 | Reply
Write more.
Please?
Double Quote: "Kiba?"
"My extremely suppressed lust for Hinata remains extremely suppressed."
Phwahahahah!! XXDD
mewmewpudding
Otaku Eternal | Posted 06/21/08 | Reply
*has nearly passed out from laughing too hard*
Oh, God, this is so true and hilarious!
One of my favorite parts had to be when they were asking about how everyone had been feeling lately.
"Kiba?"
"My extremely suppressed lust for Hinata remains extremely suppressed." XD
SomeGuy
Canadian Liaison (Team) | Posted 06/21/08 | Reply
@Markus wolfe:
Gotcha. As promised, I'll put it through for ya now. Thanks for understanding.
Markus wolfe
Grand Otaku | Posted 06/21/08 | Reply
@SomeGuy:
Author's note removed