Wow, this is absolutely brilliant. Your words are full of emotion and life, you're an amazing writer. Your descriptions are incredibly realistic, and really put the reader into the situation at hand. It's one of the best pieces of writing I've ever read; you should seriously consider getting published! I can only hope to be half as good as you someday, and keep up the great writing!

@Rageon:

Thank you so much for the encouraging comment! It's sometimes difficult for me to gauge my own stories, so third-party opinions are really useful. Thanks for taking the time to read it. :)

That was enthralling. You are an excellent story-teller, and I thought the perspective of the story is really cool. You are a great writer, and I hope you do more.

That was truly a work of art. I loved it. But when his mom's downstairs with broken glass around you spelled class instead of glass.

but seriously that was great. I feel like I just read a published book. Please continue your work!