The storyline is great so far.
It's interesting, I like it :D
And I like how you throw in some comedic stuff. "Let's go the barber" Aha
Nice job so far!
Well the same as everyone else, you don't have much for now, but the story ilne is interesting to follow. And also same, my only advice is the bubble, try to make it less so people find it more comfortable =]. You can try to smooth the line, overall, so far so good =D Good luck and keep up the good work!
hmm.. agree with some of the others - less bubbles - it is quite cluttered. maybe space out the dialogues into more pages rather than trying to fit them into one. The art's not bad but u need to clean up the lines - its too pixelly and try getting some tones for the shadows etc. i think it'll have more effect
there isnt much to say, but the storyline is good so far. great job, once u upload more pages ill read and ill tell u what i think.(btw...u misspelled friends in the first box on the first page...idk if u meant it to be like that..)ill keep reading ur manga...
you don't have much so far so i'm not sure what to say. however i will check up on this manga of yours when you have more. then i'll let you know, does that sound alright?
Well here I am to comment!
You don't have much so far so there isn't much to go by.
It doesn't look bad but try to use less word bubbles in each panel. It makes your pages look cluttered.
arcticwulf
Otaku Eternal | Posted 05/26/10 | Reply
@nadirsiddiqui:
Your welcome C:
nadirsiddiqui
Otakuite+ | Posted 05/26/10 | Reply
@arcticwulf:
thnx a lot!! :D
arcticwulf
Otaku Eternal | Posted 05/25/10 | Reply
The storyline is great so far.
It's interesting, I like it :D
And I like how you throw in some comedic stuff.
"Let's go the barber" Aha
Nice job so far!
nadirsiddiqui
Otakuite+ | Posted 05/23/10 | Reply
@yullan leibelly:
thnx for ur comment! :D
yullan leibelly
Otakuite+ | Posted 05/22/10 | Reply
Hi! Uhmmm...... Not so bad. Keep up the good work and keep practising so your skills will improve. I hope that i can skintone my work like that.
ashio
Ma cherie~ (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 05/14/10 | Reply
@nadirsiddiqui:
lol your welcome
nadirsiddiqui
Otakuite+ | Posted 05/14/10 | Reply
@ashio:
thnx a lot ASH!! :D
OopsI Forgot .. i Am A Boy
dats Okay
ashio
Ma cherie~ (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 05/14/10 | Reply
thats going good so far...there is more right? great job with the drawings though
Erie Machista
Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/17/10 | Reply
@nadirsiddiqui:
lol yeah i can see that XD just next time try to simplified it ^^-
And you are welcome~
nadirsiddiqui
Otakuite+ | Posted 04/14/10 | Reply
@Erie Machista:
Well u KNw i just Filled Bubbles ON PAGE 1 ONly.. the Rest Of The PAges ARe Just FIne ^^
thnx for ur comment!!
:D
Erie Machista
Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/14/10 | Reply
Well the same as everyone else, you don't have much for now, but the story ilne is interesting to follow. And also same, my only advice is the bubble, try to make it less so people find it more comfortable =]. You can try to smooth the line, overall, so far so good =D Good luck and keep up the good work!
nadirsiddiqui
Otakuite+ | Posted 04/14/10 | Reply
@15385bic:
Yeah Ur RYt.. I HAve To ReSIZe These PaGEs BeFore Uploading iT On Otaku... DAts Why The Pixels SUCked >>"
But Thnx For UR Comment!!!!
Will try Best!
15385bic
Lazy Chocobikies (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 04/14/10 | Reply
hmm.. agree with some of the others - less bubbles - it is quite cluttered. maybe space out the dialogues into more pages rather than trying to fit them into one. The art's not bad but u need to clean up the lines - its too pixelly and try getting some tones for the shadows etc. i think it'll have more effect
good luck =D
nadirsiddiqui
Otakuite+ | Posted 04/13/10 | Reply
Thnx EVERYONe!!!!
Will Try TO Follow Ur aDVIses
selgomz17
Otakuite+ | Posted 04/13/10 | Reply
there isnt much to say, but the storyline is good so far. great job, once u upload more pages ill read and ill tell u what i think.(btw...u misspelled friends in the first box on the first page...idk if u meant it to be like that..
)ill keep reading ur manga...
kafeole11
Otakuite++ | Posted 04/12/10 | Reply
Short so far. But the cover is very intresting as well as the title.
I'll continue to follow it.
Post more!
xdaisyx
Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/12/10 | Reply
hm well it was okay so far i mean there only 2 pgs so not much to comment about ^.^'
once you have more i will comment how great it is i'm sure of it
Pixestars
Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/12/10 | Reply
you don't have much so far so i'm not sure what to say. however i will check up on this manga of yours when you have more. then i'll let you know, does that sound alright?
TheAngelRaine
Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/12/10 | Reply
Well here I am to comment!
You don't have much so far so there isn't much to go by.
It doesn't look bad but try to use less word bubbles in each panel. It makes your pages look cluttered.