dude it looks great!!! how can u not like it. the shading is WOW one day im gonna shade like that!(i hope)xox

Its looking pretty good so far, I think the reason you think her lips look strange is 'cos of the angle, maybe if you make her chin a bit bigger.. Hope that helps :)

Dont diminsh your art!it looks great,if yuna saw her portrait drawn like this shed be proud^.^,stop by my site anytime and dont try to fix anything,leave what your first draft is alone