Wow, you really nailed the melty-effect. You did a great job on the face and hair, but I think your figure proportioning could use a little improvement. I used to have the same exact problem. Now, I try to draw the lower body a little wider than what I originally intend, and that makes a world of difference. Other than that, you did a great job on this. Your manga sounds really cool!

the effect of his body changing is really good. but once again the legs are too thin(me sorry I dont mean to be mean) ^^;

meep! *shivers* Oh, you have no idea how much I would freak out if that kinda thing happened to me! Good pic, though! I like the way his skin is melting. That there is an effect I can't draw. ^_^