Im not exactly an art critic by any means. So im just nna base this on what little I know. I like this one alot. Yes, unlined paper is good, but I know you, and most of this started as a doodle in your notebook, so I wont harass you there. But I kinda have to disagree on the smudging thing, at least on this one. It seemed to me that it had that whole sad and unhappy air to it, and the smudging kinda helped blur it and generally made it look good. But it makes me feel dweebish. I know you better than alot of people and I dont get his one...

... She looks so sad. :( Did something happen? Hm, try using paper without lines and a "Mars plastic" eraser to prevent smudging. It's helps me!