This looks pretty good so far, like everyone has already said or mentioned, I wonder if that yin-yang symbol will have some sort of meaning since its there~~ All in all, it looks great~~
This is such a cool cover Sakurie ! I'm quite interested to read what this story will be about :)
I think you could maybe add some black to the background around the the heads, like cross-hatched around them and let it fade out maybe ? I'm probably not making sense, I'm not good with explaining myself. Or something dark around the middle or top to balance out the black at the bottom
But other then that I think this is great ! I really love the broken effect you have on the girl in the middle
Can't wait til the final version m'dear !
What are you talking about? There's no need for criticism on this.
You did a fine job even if it is a draft. It looks great!
lol, it's been a while since we've last seen your characters Akarui and Kurai, huh?
It'd be nice seeing them again if you're probably working on your new original manga soon. ^^
Wow~! This needs criticism? o-O I think this is amazing!
Gomenasai!^ ^; I'm not a very good critic but I can see that this is creativity and has fantastic features~!! :D
i get what Le kun is saying.. Very well put Le chan. ;]
And I think the characters are very well proportioned- especially for pen and sharpie! I can never draw right in pen. I always have to use pencil first. grrr
burn it all. (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
I love how she's fading/tearing away and that Ying Yang symbol gives me an idea of how the guys are like. :}
I wanna know more about your characters, so submit more OC pictures gurl!~ >3
Uhm, as for help... I like this picture the way it is. Maybe it's the darkness or something, but I think it looks just fine. xD
wuuut?? This doesn't need critisism!! Well, atleast not from me, cuz i suck :D lolz XD IT LOOK AWESOME!!! I can't wait to read Akarui and Kurai's story OwO *hugs*
I think it looks great.
I really like the layout of it too, with the two guys at the side and then the girl in the middle.
But maybe you could make the black flames closest to the girl a little more refined, like the others one.
If you were trying to make it look like they were engulfing her, then don't change it.
And I think the yin yang symbol gives it a nice touch. Is it to show a contrast in the behaviour of the guys?
Well anyhoo it looks awesome. Good Luck!
Last edited by arcticwulf at 10:55:40 AM EDT on October 11, 2008.
The Insane Writer (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
i like this cover for your new manga! im guessing that there might be conflicts in between the 3 characters and the main person might be being fought over between those two boys. just a guess! does it deal with yin and yang?
maybe for a suggestion, have the bg be like a flames or something. just another guess. like what Le kun said in this commenting box before, looks like something for evil and good. just agreeing with him thats all. dont him at all either! XD anyways, i would like to read this manga! seems interesting and sad at some points. maybe some fights, verbal or non-verbal. physical maybe in some points. i like this cover! great job!
it's a very nice cover =D i don't see anything wrong with it. i'm not sure if there's anything to add to it either xD;; i love the concept of it. the yin-yang sign is just a little confusing, but i bet you're going to explain it in the story later xD the concept of the black flames is very interesting, it looks like it ties in with all three of them. it looks it'll be a tragedy and a shojo because of the girl in the middle is the important on to the two guys... (or am i totally wrong? xDD;; ) and the story of how those two characters are dead for almost two years now~
Whee~ coolio. xD [is a very bad critic. o_o;;]
So then. On with the critique. [spelling...?]
Very unique... looks good as a cover. I'm guessing that either that the three are all good guys, or the guy on the right is the bad guy. (because he has no expression. x3) Also, i think the yin yang thingie is a little random...
Oh, yeah. and the guy in the middle looks like he has 6 fingers. (now that I look closely... >.>;;) It probably just looks like that cos he's dissapearing, but yeah. Felt like pointing that out. xD
Also, the top is pretty empty. I think you should add something in there. :D
haw. I have no right to critique this. My covers are super indetailed. xDD yaay. :3
Last edited by moonlit dream at 8:08:07 AM EDT on October 11, 2008.
Based on what you said, does everything on the front cover have a significant importance to the story? Are the black flames and yin/yang symbol part of the foreshadowing? If not, there is no reason for those things to be there.
Right now I get the impression of good and evil, along with quarrels over someone important. Betrayal or death. And some romance. Is that what your going for?
YuiKaueru
Otakuite+ | Posted 10/26/08 | Reply
AWESOME!! :D It's really good! You should countinue! :D
--Yui;
Sakura Kokoro
Keepsake<3 (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/21/08 | Reply
This looks pretty good so far, like everyone has already said or mentioned, I wonder if that yin-yang symbol will have some sort of meaning since its there~~ All in all, it looks great~~
b(^ w ^)b
Wowie
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/14/08 | Reply
This is such a cool cover Sakurie ! I'm quite interested to read what this story will be about :)
I think you could maybe add some black to the background around the the heads, like cross-hatched around them and let it fade out maybe ? I'm probably not making sense, I'm not good with explaining myself. Or something dark around the middle or top to balance out the black at the bottom
But other then that I think this is great ! I really love the broken effect you have on the girl in the middle
Can't wait til the final version m'dear !
smartanimegirl
AngeliqueNade (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/12/08 | Reply
What are you talking about? There's no need for criticism on this.
You did a fine job even if it is a draft. It looks great!
lol, it's been a while since we've last seen your characters Akarui and Kurai, huh?
It'd be nice seeing them again if you're probably working on your new original manga soon. ^^
fire.freak
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
Wow~! This needs criticism? o-O I think this is amazing!
Gomenasai!^ ^; I'm not a very good critic but I can see that this is creativity and has fantastic features~!! :D
Wolfchick
Otakuite+ | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
And I think the characters are very well proportioned- especially for pen and sharpie! I can never draw right in pen. I always have to use pencil first.
grrr
Lolz. I love it.
Kissable-Krista
burn it all. (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
I love how she's fading/tearing away and that Ying Yang symbol gives me an idea of how the guys are like. :}
I wanna know more about your characters, so submit more OC pictures gurl!~ >3
Uhm, as for help... I like this picture the way it is. Maybe it's the darkness or something, but I think it looks just fine. xD
RSRKingdomStars
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
wuuut?? This doesn't need critisism!! Well, atleast not from me, cuz i suck :D lolz XD IT LOOK AWESOME!!! I can't wait to read Akarui and Kurai's story OwO *hugs*
mewmewpudding
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
WHOA. 8O
WHOOOOA.
It's so beautiful. ;w;
I love your style so much, the eyes are always so pretty.
And I love the way the girl seems to be coming 'undone' in the middle. It's so awesome! :'D
I don't think you should change anything~.
KungPowChicken
Old Chicken Nugget (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
looks nice for being a rough draft!
I hope you finish it!
plus the manga!!
XD
great job!
keep it up!
arcticwulf
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
I think it looks great.
I really like the layout of it too, with the two guys at the side and then the girl in the middle.
But maybe you could make the black flames closest to the girl a little more refined, like the others one.
If you were trying to make it look like they were engulfing her, then don't change it.
And I think the yin yang symbol gives it a nice touch. Is it to show a contrast in the behaviour of the guys?
Well anyhoo it looks awesome. Good Luck!
Last edited by arcticwulf at 10:55:40 AM EDT on October 11, 2008.
animelover7310
The Insane Writer (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
i like this cover for your new manga! im guessing that there might be conflicts in between the 3 characters and the main person might be being fought over between those two boys. just a guess! does it deal with yin and yang?
maybe for a suggestion, have the bg be like a flames or something. just another guess. like what Le kun said in this commenting box before, looks like something for evil and good. just agreeing with him thats all. dont him at all either! XD anyways, i would like to read this manga! seems interesting and sad at some points. maybe some fights, verbal or non-verbal. physical maybe in some points. i like this cover! great job!
Sora Hanaki
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
people have left such good comments~
it's a very nice cover =D i don't see anything wrong with it. i'm not sure if there's anything to add to it either xD;; i love the concept of it. the yin-yang sign is just a little confusing, but i bet you're going to explain it in the story later xD the concept of the black flames is very interesting, it looks like it ties in with all three of them. it looks it'll be a tragedy and a shojo because of the girl in the middle is the important on to the two guys... (or am i totally wrong? xDD;; ) and the story of how those two characters are dead for almost two years now~
i can't wait to see this colored!
TenshiHoshino
White Rabbit (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
Very nice concepts. It has potential. :)
Tenshi-kun
moonlit dream
Supreme Individual (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
Whee~ coolio. xD [is a very bad critic. o_o;;]
So then. On with the critique. [spelling...?]
Very unique... looks good as a cover. I'm guessing that either that the three are all good guys, or the guy on the right is the bad guy. (because he has no expression. x3) Also, i think the yin yang thingie is a little random...
Oh, yeah. and the guy in the middle looks like he has 6 fingers. (now that I look closely... >.>;;) It probably just looks like that cos he's dissapearing, but yeah. Felt like pointing that out. xD
Also, the top is pretty empty. I think you should add something in there. :D
haw. I have no right to critique this. My covers are super indetailed. xDD yaay. :3
Last edited by moonlit dream at 8:08:07 AM EDT on October 11, 2008.
The Shirt
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/11/08 | Reply
Based on what you said, does everything on the front cover have a significant importance to the story? Are the black flames and yin/yang symbol part of the foreshadowing? If not, there is no reason for those things to be there.
Right now I get the impression of good and evil, along with quarrels over someone important. Betrayal or death. And some romance. Is that what your going for?
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