It's good except the story line sounds alot like Sasuke's backround, but it's still gewd

I like it it's better than I can do.And for a name for the brother I like the name Akira. ^___^

cooool! i like her eye color! and welcome to the otaku! btw, i think her mouth is a bit high up, but thats all! she looks great! for names for her friends, you should try wacaba, or shouta, or takahiro! i like those names! -Uramihcoro