WOW! nice pic and the story is touching!...Im gonna make something like this two!

i think its really spiff the story you came up with. but to me, homoculas, are overrated, everyones making one, and it throws your oc, into a taboo and a mark as a sue v.v Just remeber, Your oc dosn't need a Homoculus, or Automail to be a FMA charater. they DONT need them. that just makes them so sue-ish to the FIFTH degree XD but thats how i feel, so. take it however you wish. if you don't no what i mean by sue, pm me ^-^ i'll be happy to tell you what i mean. The Coloring is VERY CUTE ^^ I think her upper body reminds me of, the way pink hanamori ''Mermaid Melody Pichi Pichi'' does her bodies. so i think its alright! ^^ her hips, and smotach are VERY wonky thou. take more time in coloring!! n.n you'll find better results! Kokkoii-Matokus number one rule: Never Give Up! Live it, Learn it, Love it n_n!