I'd say it'll need a little more work, but other then that.. It's GREAT! Keep it up! Ebony(Aryn).. OV&Ot(Over & Out.)

Great work! The only comment I really have to make is that in most manga the font is in all caps, also if you want a font that is similar to the fonts that are published search for the Anime Ace font and download it, if you do this and need directions to install, PM me! Great work! ~cosmo2389

that is so cool! Wow and every panal you draw has some good details

I think the kids head is a bit squishy on the last panel...but other than that go into a little more detail with the bg... I think it's intresting I wish you made more... I'm voteing yes, S&M Mistress Kitten

Aww...that..that would be really hard to deal with the death of your mother good work thou.