Hmm... you have really got something there. I am interested... Your style and stuff seems neat enough to read. (^_^; ~Keep your eyes on the road~

Yo, stopped by bcuz you asked for professional comments. well I can say, the first page is great. you get right into the action! well done

i'm guessing that since you're going to publish it, you have more than 4 pages. one thing you have to keep in mind is your grammar and spelling. publishers won't accept it if it has grammar or spelling mistakes. so...it should be "i will reach THE greatest contest...." and "...show the world who the best inventor is." you got some mistakes there. in terms of art, it's okay. there's nothing wrong. my computer is really slow, so please don't mind if i don't vote up. sorry. but i think it's good page.

Very nice!