I was writing it from Naruto's point of view to Sasuke. From the starting Shippuden stand point. Sasuke is very important to him but he has to bring him home. Whatever it takes. Thank you for the feedback also. It's nice to see this poem is still attracting readers.
I've been working on a poem about someone who was abused. It's slightly graphic via a bit of explicit language. Perhaps I could tone it down a little and send it to you. Maybe it could be what you're looking for. And thanks for all the compliments. I'm very thankfull.
GOD DAMN! YOUR REALLY GOOD!!! hey im just wondering if you can write me a poem an abuse? cause im doing a ANTI-ABUSE thing on my site... so if you could i would really apreaciteate it! and if you dont want to thants okay!
omg....
this is VERY VERY VERY AWESOME!
i know wat i am saying needs more ajectives than jus "awesome"... but i am left speechless.....
you are a better poet than me ^.^ lol
This poem is from Naruto to Sasuke really. More from the Shippuden stand point. He loves Sasuke, he's like a brother. But he has to do whatever it takes to bring him back, whether Sasuke wants him to or not. That's the whole focal point of the poem. {I think that was everything.} Thanks for the feedback.
bloodunderrazor
Otaku Eternal | Posted 02/12/12 | Reply
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I was writing it from Naruto's point of view to Sasuke. From the starting Shippuden stand point. Sasuke is very important to him but he has to bring him home. Whatever it takes. Thank you for the feedback also. It's nice to see this poem is still attracting readers.
bloodunderrazor
Otaku Eternal | Posted 10/08/08 | Reply
@freya42:
I've been working on a poem about someone who was abused. It's slightly graphic via a bit of explicit language. Perhaps I could tone it down a little and send it to you. Maybe it could be what you're looking for. And thanks for all the compliments. I'm very thankfull.
freya42
Senior Otaku | Posted 10/06/08 | Reply
GOD DAMN! YOUR REALLY GOOD!!! hey im just wondering if you can write me a poem an abuse? cause im doing a ANTI-ABUSE thing on my site... so if you could i would really apreaciteate it! and if you dont want to thants okay!
bloodunderrazor
Otaku Eternal | Posted 06/28/08 | Reply
@Otomi Babii:
You've got great skill of your own you know. Don't sell yourself short. And thanks for the comment. I'm greatful.
Otomi Babii
Da Don~ (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 06/27/08 | Reply
omg....
this is VERY VERY VERY AWESOME!
i know wat i am saying needs more ajectives than jus "awesome"... but i am left speechless.....
you are a better poet than me ^.^ lol
sango1800
Otakuite | Posted 04/28/08 | Reply
Very nicely written. You have a great writing style. Im trying to write a poem about Kakashi's past but its not nearly as good as yours ^-^
bloodunderrazor
Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/19/08 | Reply
@Anime Dreamer001:
I only just realized I didn't actually explain the point of that poem when I posted it. Sorry about that.
Anime Dreamer001
Otakuite | Posted 04/09/08 | Reply
@bloodunderrazor:
No problem.That was my girlfriend that asked that.^^'
bloodunderrazor
Otaku Eternal | Posted 04/08/08 | Reply
@Anime Dreamer001:
This poem is from Naruto to Sasuke really. More from the Shippuden stand point. He loves Sasuke, he's like a brother. But he has to do whatever it takes to bring him back, whether Sasuke wants him to or not. That's the whole focal point of the poem. {I think that was everything.} Thanks for the feedback.
Anime Dreamer001
Otakuite | Posted 04/06/08 | Reply
it is kool but how does this relate to naruto? But who is the charater you are describing?
shizuka101
Otaku Legend | Posted 03/25/08 | Reply
Skulltears
Otakuite | Posted 03/21/08 | Reply
this poem is COMPLETLY AND TOTALLY...AWESOME. u have a play on words and i get the whole thing...keep writing...i might start writing again too...
bloodunderrazor
Otaku Eternal | Posted 03/16/08 | Reply
@Ami the Eldest:
This poem is for Naruto. Or from Naruto for Sasuke really.
Nanao44
Senior Otaku+ | Posted 03/15/08 | Reply
Wow
Ami the Eldest
Senior Otaku+ | Posted 03/15/08 | Reply
Oooh, this is good.
I'm curious,
who's the poem about?
inuykisha
Otakuite+ | Posted 03/14/08 | Reply
Hey i feel ru pain 2. Its a great work of words of feelings.:3
just.me
DragonGirl (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 03/13/08 | Reply
Very good poem :3
Anime 300
Grand Otaku | Posted 03/12/08 | Reply
Interesting. I liked how you played with the words.
AKIDA KARAS
Otakuite++ | Posted 03/12/08 | Reply
that. was. deep.
ShadowLight
Otaku Eternal | Posted 03/11/08 | Reply
Impressive and powerful.
The crazy bubbly shadow
bloodunderrazor
Otaku Eternal | Posted 03/11/08 | Reply
I'm still so happy to be getting good feedback for this poem. *Does a little happy dance in the corner* Thank you all very much.
Seven of Nine
Otakuite | Posted 03/11/08 | Reply
I love this poem. You should publish it!
inuyashafreak20
Otakuite | Posted 03/11/08 | Reply
Woot!! IT ROCKED!!!! Nice one NINJA
!!!! Cant wait to read more!
bloodunderrazor
Otaku Eternal | Posted 03/11/08 | Reply
Thanks for the responses everyone. I was really nervous about posting this, so I'm glad you liked it.
SaturnSakura
Pixie Bard (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 03/10/08 | Reply
wow. this is awesome.
first stanza had me hooked. =]