Writing exercise, 2 April, 2011

(Story prompts)
Genres: Fantasy, Mystery
Story elements: A crashing dirigible, a daring rescue, heartbreak

Aiden watched the horizon with a heavy heart. Why had Rosa left him? Could it be that she had discovered what he was—what he had become?
This evening he had awakened to a note on her door, telling him that she didn’t want him to look for her.
A solitary tear escaped to flow down his cheek, before a light in the sky caught his eye.
Aiden knew that her dirigible was scheduled to pass this point soon, and this light did not bode well.
He followed the light. and gasped as the flaming shape of the dirigible crashed to the ground.
Moving at the superhuman speed of his kind, he ran to the site of the crash, his every sense alert, both for the pilot and the cause of the crash.
Sniffing the air, he caught her sweet scent, a sent as familiar to him as his own, mingled with a horrible burned smell. His stomach lurched at it, and he leaped forward climbing into the wreckage.
He saw the cause of the crash—the remnants of a bomb—and redoubled his efforts to find Rosa.
Breaking into the pilot’s compartment, he found her limp form.
***
Rosa’s eyes fluttered open and Aiden’s face came into focus.
*Are you all right?”
She struggled to sit up, but something held her down.
“Don’t try to move just yet” someone, presumably the monster who had claimed to love her, said.
“Get away from me” she ground out.
***
Aiden reeled from the pure hatred that coated Rosa’s words. She knew, of that he was certain.
“Shh,” he said gently. “I won’t hurt you. You know that.”
He sat back on his heels.
“Your airship crashed. Someone planted a bomb.”
“It was probably you” Rosa spat at him. “If you can’t have me, no one can, right?”
“I would never…” Aiden began, but Rosa’s angry voice cut him off.
“Just shut up and go away” she said.
Aiden looked her over once, trying to find some injury, some reason he couldn’t leave her alone, but found none.
As he vanished into the night, he heard Rosa’s sobs and the last shards of his heart shattered.
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I wrote this, after receiving the above prompts--what do you think?

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