And you do!! :D So good job, and thanks for always commenting~
That was a beautiful piece of literature.
But actually, maybe dialogue like that could be a transition into deeper dialogue? Idk, sometimes the boring stuff feels necessary. xD
Oh really?? Thanks! ;u; Dialogue is my favorite thing to write... and then I get stuck on everything else. xD;
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;w; Thank you, I try to make my comments worth reading...Or make them at least seem like I care about what I'm commenting on.
I do that all the time...;3; I'll consciously decide to make them sound a certain way and then they don't sound human what-so-ever...'orz That or I try to make it realistic and it just end up being like
'Yo, 'sup?
'Nothin' much, you?'
'Nah, just kinda bored'
'Okay.'
....;m; Dats not good writing. It's realistic, but who wants to read that?
But I think you do wonderfully at dialogue, it's very impressive! *3*
Aha, that's okay. YOU'RE SUCH A GOOD COMMENTER, YOU DESERVE BREAKS! ;u;
Ah, thanks though. Gabe's not too difficult since I hear people talk like him a lot in school... but I get confused on how to consciously make characters sound different from one another. xD; And yeah, I get nervous about making everything sound too dramatic... because if that happens, nothing'll be taken seriously. :T
Sorry to hear about the dialogue! ;m; But sometimes dialogue can come out alright if you make it up on the fly. 8D
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Yah, I read this before and didn't comment 'cause I was busy/tired/lazy at the time and didn't feel like commenting on anything...
But I didn't think the writing was so bad. I can imagine it to be very hard to talk like Gabe, but you did a very good job at that! It IS very easy to get too carried away with writing, though...I find myself constantly having to stop and go back 'cause I went to far and everything started sounding stupid...'orz (Like if you looked at my notes for the second chapter of Idolling you wouldn't be able to read them because they're all basically scratched out, so I had a hard time with the dialogue 'cause I didn't have any dialogue...)
moonlit dream
Supreme Individual (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 07/13/13 | Reply
@Wakusei Aoshi:
And you do!! :D So good job, and thanks for always commenting~
That was a beautiful piece of literature.
But actually, maybe dialogue like that could be a transition into deeper dialogue? Idk, sometimes the boring stuff feels necessary. xD
Oh really?? Thanks! ;u; Dialogue is my favorite thing to write... and then I get stuck on everything else. xD;
Last edited by moonlit dream at 1:09:56 PM EDT on July 13, 2013.
Wakusei Aoshi
Otaku Eternal | Posted 07/13/13 | Reply
@moonlit dream:
;w; Thank you, I try to make my comments worth reading...Or make them at least seem like I care about what I'm commenting on.
I do that all the time...;3; I'll consciously decide to make them sound a certain way and then they don't sound human what-so-ever...'orz That or I try to make it realistic and it just end up being like
'Yo, 'sup?
'Nothin' much, you?'
'Nah, just kinda bored'
'Okay.'
....;m; Dats not good writing. It's realistic, but who wants to read that?
But I think you do wonderfully at dialogue, it's very impressive! *3*
moonlit dream
Supreme Individual (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 07/12/13 | Reply
@Wakusei Aoshi:
Aha, that's okay. YOU'RE SUCH A GOOD COMMENTER, YOU DESERVE BREAKS! ;u;
Ah, thanks though. Gabe's not too difficult since I hear people talk like him a lot in school... but I get confused on how to consciously make characters sound different from one another. xD; And yeah, I get nervous about making everything sound too dramatic... because if that happens, nothing'll be taken seriously. :T
Sorry to hear about the dialogue! ;m; But sometimes dialogue can come out alright if you make it up on the fly. 8D
Last edited by moonlit dream at 8:48:10 PM EDT on July 12, 2013.
Wakusei Aoshi
Otaku Eternal | Posted 07/12/13 | Reply
Yah, I read this before and didn't comment 'cause I was busy/tired/lazy at the time and didn't feel like commenting on anything...
But I didn't think the writing was so bad. I can imagine it to be very hard to talk like Gabe, but you did a very good job at that! It IS very easy to get too carried away with writing, though...I find myself constantly having to stop and go back 'cause I went to far and everything started sounding stupid...'orz (Like if you looked at my notes for the second chapter of Idolling you wouldn't be able to read them because they're all basically scratched out, so I had a hard time with the dialogue 'cause I didn't have any dialogue...)