Author's comment: Either those kids were construction geniuses or this story mekes no sense at all. Actually even if they were geniuses the story still makes no sense. But still one of the best stories I wrote too. I feel like I ended the story waaay too abruptly and I think I must've noticed because I later on wrote a part 2 of the story. I wrote this one when I 10yrs old. Like most of the stories I wrote as a kid. Enjoy. Post comment if you read it!
The kids who thought they were pirates
There once was a group of boys who loved to play together and pretend they were pirates. One day Elliot suggested: “We should build a boat with the wood my dad gave me! Playing pirates will be a lot more fun that way. ”
But Vaughn said: “Wouldn’t it be better if we actually go to the beach and sail away?!”
“That sounds great! And we can take Lorinda with us and force her to cook for us!”- replied Belly (once of the boy’s name was Belly).
“Alright! Let’s get our boat ready!” –yelled Marty and they all started working
While they were working, Belly asked: “Who’s going to bring fishing nets and how are we going to convince Lorinda to come with us?”
“I can bring fishing nets but there is no way I’m dealing with Lorinda!”-replied Marty
None of the boys wanted to deal with her, she was mean. But in one way or the other Vaughn was forced to go deal with her because he was the wimpiest of the group.
So Vaughn ended up having to walk all the way to Lorinda’s house and deal with her.
“What do you want?”-said Lorinda when she saw him
“Uh… Lorinda! We’re building a boat and we’re going to take you and force you to cook for us whether you like it or not!”-replied Vaughn
“No you’re not! Loser!”
Vaughn grabbed her with kidnapping intentions but she wrestled away after fighting for a little while Vaughn got tired and told her: “If you go I’ll give you five dollars”. Lorinda liked the idea so she joined the group.
The day finally arrived. They were leaving at six in the morning so their parents wouldn’t notice. All they left to their parents was a note that said: “Mom and dad I love you very much”. After that they got together and set sail. Everything was going smoothly somehow they had managed to sail to very deep parts of the ocean and this was what caused their adventure to be cut short. For two very silly pirates saw them in the distance and confused the children for real pirates! So what did the silly pirates do? They sent the kids flying with two cannon balls. Luckily, non-of the children died but the boat did. Each child took a piece of wood from the destroyed boat and managed to float. Then the pirates realized that these were only children so they took them back to their parents. Their parents were so mad each one found a way to punish their child. No more video games for Vaughn, mental therapy for Belly, Lorinda had to stay in her room and the rest just got spanked.
Author's comment: I recently went to the museum of natural history in NYC and this story instantly came to mind! I was like "this is definitely the next story I'll post!" Anyway the museum was amazing! It has changed from the last time I was there but it's still great and some parts are completely the same as last time. O.k as for the art and story... Yes flying bicycles. E.T style! lol. I think the art I made for this post is a tad plain but trust me that bicycle took most of my morning. You know I suck at drawing with my tablet. It takes me sooo long! And I was using reference. (This one to be exact). But I still like the out come even if it's too plain! As for the story, well there are a lot of things that make zero sense. Also I changed a few details from the original to make it less draggy and less retarded but a little bit more fun. Still a very retarded story but personally I think it's one of the best stories I've posted so far. Eeeh~~~
Title: When Charlotte and Bianca went to the moon
Once upon a time there were two girls. Bianca was the youngest, she was 9 years old. Charlotte was the other, she was ten. These two were friends and they loved to star gaze. They also loved to go on adventures.
One day Bianca was watching the news and they said that midnight there would be a meteor shower at midnight. The girls planned a sleepover together so they could sneak out and see it!
“We’ll see a lot of falling stars tonight!”-said Charlotte
“Yeah! And we’ll see the moon running with the stars!!!”-said Bianca
The sleepover was to be held at Bianca’s place so Charlotte left home at 6:00pm and went to over to Bianca’s on her bike.
At midnight they snuck out. The sky was beautiful there were so many beautiful falling stars and you could see them so clearly! Like never before! The girls got on their bikes and took off at such as speed they were suddenly flying! Up, up in the sky! They kept on riding their bikes in the sky they went straight to the moon. They said hi to the moon and the moon told them to feel free to also go to talk to the planets and play with the stars. After talking to the moon for a bit they left and went to the planets. But the planets weren’t very nice so they just left and went to the stars. Now the stars, they were a trip! They played with them for a while but the stars were too crazy so the girls went back to the moon. After two seconds the stars came after the girls and began pulling on their clothes so they would play with them again, the stars were very childish. The girls went back to playing with the stars.
When the planets saw this they got jealous and changed their mind. Now they wanted to join them and they did. They also played with other types of celestial bodies. They even discovered that the Milky Way Galaxy as a whole was alive and had a very nice personality and well of course inside her where all the others they had met.
“Well, I think we should get going”-said Charlotte.
“Oh, before you leave… There is someone we would like you to meet.”-said the Moon.
“Who?”-asked the girls.
“The Queen of Stars, Supernova!”-said the stars.
The girls suddenly saw a huge stellar explosion in the distance and then there she was… the Supernova remnant, the Queen. She was beautiful! But they couldn’t get too close to her.
“Hohohoho! Rise and shine!”- a thick evil voice was suddenly heard.
“Oh no! It’s the sun!”- the girls said. “We have to go!!!”
They took their bikes and off they went, but it was too late. Their parents had already noticed that they had snuck out and grounded them the moment they came back.
Author's comment: I wrote this story in 2001 so the plot makes a lot of sense. The president at the time was George W. Bush, so there you have him! Eh, lol~ Sorry Mr. Ex-President, I tried my best! This story is kinda weird! Sorry that I made it so that the president didn't want to help and that the reason for him to change his mind was so silly... You know kids~ I was only 10 when I wrote this!
Meeting Mr. President
A long, long time ago there was a city called Poor-engol. It was a very poor city, but it had not always been that way. Before it was a fun city, every family would pick Poor-engol as the vacation destination! But then one day, strangers from a different country came and wreaked havoc, stealing everything they could. The strangers would say that if part of the name was poor then this would fit the city just fine. After this the citizens of Poor-engol were left poor and unable to stand up and build up the city again. Sometimes the citizens would find some money lying around and go to the grocery store but these were almost empty too.
One day an eleven year old girl named Brigitte was watching the news and the story of Poor-engol was on. This made Brigitte feel upset, so she decided that she would leave that very night (without telling her parents), to help the city. So she made a list of all the things she would need, she packed she took a shower and went to sleep. She would wake up at midnight and leave in secrecy. Before she could go to bed, though, her mother yelled at her to go mop the bathroom’s floor. It was always the same story. Brigitte always made a mess while showering.
Ring! Ring! Ring! Went her alarm clock. It was finally midnight and for some reason she went straight to the white house to talk to the president. However, once she got there she realized he was sleeping. So she went to sleep on the side walk while she waited for him.
It was finally morning so she begged the guards to let her in but they wouldn’t let her. Until the president himself came down and told them to let her in! She quickly went inside, she used a bathroom in the white house where she took a shower and then she meddled in the first lady’s toiletries and used her perfume. Brigitte was a very nonchalant girl.
After that, she had breakfast with the president and the first lady. The president was very nice and he asked her tons of questions. Then the first lady asked her: “Where are your parents?” “Oh, they’re at home”-answered silly Brigitte. The president and first lady laughed.
After breakfast the president finally asked: “So what did you wanna talk about?” When Brigitte told him that what she wanted was for him to help her help the city of Poor-engol he grimaced, he did not want to help that city. He was busy enough as it was!
But in the end Brigitte was so annoying and misbehaved and quite the beggar that the president gave up and decided to help her; and because he wanted her as far away from him as possible he sent her to the city of Poor-engol by airplane. But before she left she remembered she had gone without telling her parents! So she wrote them the following letter:
“Dear mom & dad,
I want you to know that I’m doing fine. I left home so I could help Poor-engol city
After sending the letter she left and in about a week the city was fun and economically healthy again! They even changed the name of the city to Fun-engol!
Hey guys!!! I had been wanting to do this like for six months! Here's the story, when I was a kid my parents loved to go on long car rides and I would get seriously bored. One time my cousins got me some really cool colored pencils with animal pencil tops. I loved those colored pencils so much I took them with me on the car trip we to some days after they gave them to me. In the car I started doing drawing drafts for a story I wanted to write later. But I never got around doing it. I just saved the drafts in the tube the colored pencils came in. The good news are that I loved those pencils SO MUCH I kept them forever and took good care of them so I still have them and guess what's still inside?! The drafts! This is how some of my drawing drafts looked (Yep! I drew THAT ugly when I was a little girl! But I loved it and still do):
I've decided that today will be the day I finally put this story in writing! The title is: Do not touch this box because it was one of the little notes written on the drafts.
The characters are the following:
1. The princess
2. The witch
3. The prince (I was too lazy to take pics of drafts with him on it. He was kinda ugly. lol. Never been good at drawing guys...)
4. The Butterfly
5. The Star
Title: Do not touch that box!
Once upon a time there was an adventurous little princess who's best friend was a giant butterfly. One beautiful morning they went out into the woods and found an old black castle. They walked around it and the princess found a mysterious looking box. It was black with a flower made of precious stones embedded in the center. The box had a note, it clearly said: Do not touch this box. However the little princess told heerself: "But it's soooo pretty! How can I refrain?". The butterfly told her: "Let's see what's inside! What's the worst that could happen?". The princess opened the box. A strong light blided them and a strong wind pushed them back. Then suddely it was over.
The princess looked around her nothing seemed different. "You see, nothing happened!"-said the butterfly and they laughed only to be interrupted by a floating, shiny, blue star. "Something horrible did happen!"-said the star. "You just unleashed the witch!". "What are you saying?"-asked the princess and the butterfly. "A long time ago there was an evil witch, the owner of this castle, I fought her and sealed her inside that box, however I accidentally sealed myslef in it too~ Now I'm free but we have to do something about the witch before she resumes her evil dealings again."
The princess and the butterfly apologized and promised the star they would help him stop the witch. When they went inside the castle they instantly fell into the witches trap. She trapped in separate cages. Then she got a really big pot and began to concoct a beauty potion so no one would recognize her. Part of this concoction was the flower that had been the seal on the box.
After she was done with that she would cook the princess and her friends and feed them to her minions. While she was planning these things she heard someone in the woods. The witch looked out the window and saw a very handsome prince. She quickly drank the beauty potion and transformed into a very beautiful girl. Inside, however, she was still a rotten witch.
Knocking was suddenly heard. It was the prince. The witch opened the door and said hello. He told her he was looking for the princess. "Her dad told me she was exploring in the woods and I figured I should join her."-said the prince. This enraged the witch! She wanted attention! So she put a spell on him. Instantly making the prince fall in love with her! He asked her out on a date and she agreed. They left, leaving the captive princess, butterfly and star behind.
This gave them time, or so they thought. The witch told the prince she had left something inside, quickly came back and with her witch powers transferred the princess to the boiling pot and left. The princess was now burning. The butterfly and star were panicking but the butterfly managed to escape and pull the princess up and right out of the boiling pot! The princess was safe! And because the witch never waited for the beauty potion to finish cooking while she was on her date the effects wore out and she went back to her witchy self, green skin and everything. When the prince saw her the spell broke, he scowled.
He couldn't believe her.
The witch was actually devastated. The butterfly flew over there and told him what had happened. In the mean time the princess had helped the star out of captivity. The prince, princess, star and butterfly left and the witch went back to her castle, alone and bored. Her self esteem was so low after seeing how the prince scowled at her unsightly look that she decided to stay inside her castle without ever coming out again or trying to cook anyone ever again.
This is kinda how the story would've gone! Don't forget to comment!!Thanks for reading!
Author's comment: I think out of all the stories I wrote as a child, this one along with The test were the worst... But especially this one, it deserves to be thrown in the garbage right now. It's so bad I definitely changed minor details to make it less whiney, gosh!!! How irritating! What in the world could posses me to write such a horrible and ungrateful story at the age of 10? I feel like I took it too far, and a hay bed? Seriously. The story just makes zero sense. Oh, but I remember the day I wrote this. I was 10 and at the Doctor's waiting room. You all have no idea the vexation being at waiting rooms always caused me as a kid but that specific Dr was THE WORST!!! Oh and disclaimer I'm the youngest but me and my sister are only 1.5 year apart so this sorta thing never happened at home. You know I hated this story so much I almost stopped re-writing it but that just isn't like me so I kept going! So if you bother to read this let me know! lol. Am I overreacting?
There once was a girl named Dena whose parents always got her whatever toys or things she wanted. One day she learned that soon she would have a baby sister! This made her very happy because she would have someone to play with now.
Her sister, Meggie, was born on April and by May she realized that having a little sister was not a good thing. Thanks to her now she couldn’t get whatever she wanted when she wanted it, plus no one paid attention to her. Everything was all about the baby now…
But of course that wasn’t the only problem. Dena also had a fourteen-year-old sister, Grace. Who still got whatever she wanted when she wanted it. Meggie found both Grace and Meggie incredibly annoying; especially Meggie because she was always making a mess. One day Meggie broke one of their mother’s fancy fine china vases but their mom thought Dena had done it and that she was blaming her little sister.
- “Dena, you insolent child! Clean that up before someone gets hurt and go to your room!”
After her mom was done yelling at her Meggie looked at Dena and made a mocking face. This made Dena really upset so she yelled at her little sister:
- “Meggie, you’re dumb and this is all your fault!
After seeing Dena with such an attitude her mother slapped her and Dena ran to her room crying.
One day Dena came home after school and to her big surprise her room was empty. Only her clothes remained and her bed had been replaced with hay. She sat on her bed and started to cry. She could hear happy voices downstairs. They were celebrating a party for Grace and Meggie with lots of gifts and goodie bags! But that didn’t matter to her, all she was interested in was knowing what had happened to all her stuff. She looked around the house and realized her sisters had split her things!
Dena decided to go downstairs to complain but at that same moment Meggie dropped the cake from the table and blamed it Dena. Meggie was a rotten two year old baby by now. Dena just went back to her room before her mother could yell at her again.
Now the end of the school’s semester had come and summer was about to start so the school was holding family activity for the students and their families. Each student had to bring something to share with the rest. Dena told her mom but she told her to buy whatever she had to take herself and that she could go alone if she wanted to go. Luckily Dena found a $5.00 bill on the street and with it she bought some snacks to share with the rest. The day of the activity finally arrived, sadly it was raining. Dena asked her mom to take her but her mom told her to walk. Dena left.
After a while it stopped raining and everyone was able to go outside and enjoy the outdoor activities. Suddenly Dena saw her mom and her sisters they all felt bad for what they had done, even two-year-old Meggie! They also brought her gifts and they all became a happy family again!