I'm glad you liked it :D As I said, my skills are kind of lacking so I'll work more on making things flow. I'll try to fix that as I write the second part.
=o all in all I really like this! You really do suspense well. The only thing I would change is how you describe things. Not that you do it bad, you do it well. But, it could flow better. Does that make sense? I can't wait to read the rest! I kinda want to write something now...
art4life
Otakuite++ | Posted 07/25/15 | Reply
@SmallxLady:
Thank you :)
SmallxLady
Grand Otaku | Posted 07/24/15 | Reply
@art4life:
I wouldn't say lacking at all, its more fine tuning. You're doing great so far though ^^
art4life
Otakuite++ | Posted 07/24/15 | Reply
@SmallxLady:
I'm glad you liked it :D As I said, my skills are kind of lacking so I'll work more on making things flow. I'll try to fix that as I write the second part.
SmallxLady
Grand Otaku | Posted 07/23/15 | Reply
=o all in all I really like this! You really do suspense well. The only thing I would change is how you describe things. Not that you do it bad, you do it well. But, it could flow better. Does that make sense? I can't wait to read the rest! I kinda want to write something now...
Usagi