HEEEE! Oh God, this was classic. Loved the dialogue between Cyrus and Jamal, and the way you answered the prompt at the end. I was definitely giggling. I agree with Red - the tone is fantastic.
And you know, when you said "It did not matter that soft-spoken and sensitive men had taken over on televison and in movies," I remembered that I read an article about that last week. XD
Reaaaal quick nitpick, but you're missing some punctuation in "Punk Why I ought to...!" Otherwise, it flowed wonderfully.
Oh dude, I LOVED this! Especially the climax! And the tone! It's full of all sorts of win! Hot damn, I hope you continue writing the prompts. You rock!
Nehszriah
Title: Otaku Legend | Posted 06/11/08 | Reply
@SomeGuy:
Thank you! ^//^
Be true, be you and of couse, be otaku.SomeGuy
Title: Team | Posted 06/11/08 | Reply
Awww! Cyrus, you poor bastard! Haha . . .
Loved it. I've always had a fondness for fast, smart dialogue . . . and you, my dear, have nailed that fondness with a natural 20 critical hit.
I think it's fairly safe to say that this is the most epic writing prompt response we've had to date. Kudos to you.
Nehszriah
Title: Otaku Legend | Posted 06/11/08 | Reply
@NightBeck:
You know, I think I might have read that exact same article. ^_^
Oh, man. Looks like the singular exclamation point I forgot to add destroyed it. (Stupid things don't transfer.) Thanks; I'll go fix it right now.
I'll keep 'em coming, as long as you keep the prompts going.
Be true, be you and of couse, be otaku.Nehszriah
Title: Otaku Legend | Posted 06/11/08 | Reply
@red tigress:
Thanks a ton Red! I'm glad it met the girl-gamer's standards. ^_^v
Be true, be you and of couse, be otaku.NightBeck
Title: Otaku Legend | Posted 06/11/08 | Reply
HEEEE! Oh God, this was classic. Loved the dialogue between Cyrus and Jamal, and the way you answered the prompt at the end. I was definitely giggling. I agree with Red - the tone is fantastic.
And you know, when you said "It did not matter that soft-spoken and sensitive men had taken over on televison and in movies," I remembered that I read an article about that last week. XD
Reaaaal quick nitpick, but you're missing some punctuation in "Punk Why I ought to...!" Otherwise, it flowed wonderfully.
Can't wait to see more from you!
red tigress
Title: Otaku Legend | Posted 06/10/08 | Reply
Oh dude, I LOVED this! Especially the climax! And the tone! It's full of all sorts of win! Hot damn, I hope you continue writing the prompts. You rock!