I know. It's not one of my best stroies and thanks for the constructive critism (I know I spelled that worng sorry>.<). But maybe he really was a phycopath all along and just itching to kill so when he killed her brother he was all weird (?) and when his wife betrayed him he hated her a lot on killed her? Is that confusing?
Thank you!!! It's greatly appriciated (sorry if I spelled that wrong>.<) that peopkle like this story so much! And I'm honoured that you liked it so much you'd tell it at your Halloween party! Thanks again!
Kazumi Saya
Title: Otakuite++ | Posted 11/04/08 | Reply
very good and creative loved it
Keome
Title: Senior Otaku++ | Posted 10/28/08 | Reply
@Anomaly:
I know. It's not one of my best stroies and thanks for the constructive critism (I know I spelled that worng sorry>.<). But maybe he really was a phycopath all along and just itching to kill so when he killed her brother he was all weird (?) and when his wife betrayed him he hated her a lot on killed her? Is that confusing?
I have become Oyashiro-sama!Keome
Title: Senior Otaku++ | Posted 10/28/08 | Reply
@Madison2294:
Thank you!!! It's greatly appriciated (sorry if I spelled that wrong>.<) that peopkle like this story so much! And I'm honoured that you liked it so much you'd tell it at your Halloween party! Thanks again!
I have become Oyashiro-sama!Madison2294
Title: Senior Otaku+ | Posted 10/28/08 | Reply
Very creepy, I'm gonna tell this one at my Halloween party!! No jokes!!
Anomaly
Title: Otaku Legend | Posted 10/26/08 | Reply
Too straight-forward and way too easy. Also, it doesn't make sense that he loved his wife because he was all too willing to kill her.
SakuraKatana
Title: Otakuite+ | Posted 10/25/08 | Reply
The part with "murder" in the title immediately caught my eye, and the story didn't disappoint. Nice job! <3
kyokyo555
Title: Senior Otaku | Posted 10/23/08 | Reply
Awesome! Nice murder story,Keome-chan!
I love these kinda storys!