Senior Otaku++ | Posted 09/17/12 | Reply
I think its written very well!! I can tell how much effort you put into it too, and I love the names especially the Mace's name Holy x3 Ah take your time, I'm sure the scene where they fight Zefith will be so cool!
Ah thanks! I actually used to read a lot of novels before getting into manga so I had practice xD I will have to sit down and read everything in more detail when you get the next part up too, so like I said so far its really neat! Nice work, my friend!
Yeah, I'm not used to cutting the Play-By-Play entirely. But I thought that the action was slow too. Without the Play-by-Play it seemed way longer, that's why I had to stop. I really wish I coulld've gotten to the part where they fight Zefith.
You speed-read quite well, considering that I just finished this in less than an hour. It'd take forever for read this. It took almost half a lifetime to write it.
Hey!!! This is awesome, bro!! I love that intro :D i'm so happy that you had some time to start writing this out! So far so good... I agree with you though, some part seemed that they would be better in play-by-play but I still love all the detail! It just doesn't move fast enough in some places I guess... But I really like the idea so far! I didnt get to read all of the ending here cuz I'm short on time (again =_=) but keep it up!