Wow...That was amazing......It was very touching...and*Wah cries uncrontrolably*..ok I'm better...It was amazing...If i have 2 give any advice...use better vocab. ,but it was amazing as is. Well keep up the good work...when you do the Gaara and Hinata one's PM me OK

@adolf:

Really? Thanks, Adolf!

(I still think this is the only fanfiction I'll ever write that's decent. . .)

you should write more i liked it very much

@Squee-Neji:

And your point....?

@KoInu kyan:

I get it. . . .but Neji isn't made of fail, end of story.

We should really stop, this is going to take up the entire page. . . .

@Squee-Neji:

AND Kankuro AND Temari. You can't forget those two.

@KoInu kyan:

Neji doesn't fail He's the last person that would fail. He's a jonin, while everyone else is a chunnin. . . .except for Gaara, because Gaara's a freak.

@Squee-Neji:

Nah, Quebec's the one who is failing right now...so NYAA!

@KoInu kyan:

No, my self confidence (or lack thereof) is fine the way it is. Someone needs to fail, and it's gonna be me. Right, Neji.

Neji: . . .ZZZ. . .

Squee: SEEE?!?!?

@Squee-Neji:

Squeechan needs to work on that...self confidance thingy...

@KoInu kyan:

So what if I don't have any self confindence! I am DENSTINED to fail epicly, forever

@Squee-Neji:

Nya~Just for the record, Squeechan has always been a good writer. And, just for the record, Squeechan has just had no self confidance. Lucky 13. Yay!

@mewmewpudding:

Wow, you really liked it? Thank you! It's just *prods fingers Hinata style* I've never been a very good fanfiction writer. . . .this was my first decent one that I can actally look at again without vomiting. . . .

Hey! I like Hinata too *also dodges rocks* she's my favorite girl character! I don't know. . . .I must be hooked on Hyuugas. XD

Anyways, thank you for your comment!

You should most certainly write more! I was hooked into this one. :3

I'd like to see the Hinata one 'cause she's my favorite. *dodges rocks*

@Markus wolfe:

Yup, yup, yup, Rish took it as a flamer.

@Markus wolfe:

Of course, I didn't think you ment to be insulting, you just wanted give advice. It's fine, just please pick your words carefuly, or else someone could take them as an insult or flamer.

@Squee-Neji:

Whoops, did I sound condescending? I didn't mean to, it's just my nature. Will you forgive my nature?

@Markus wolfe:

Meanie-face. >:P

@Markus wolfe:

First of all, I said I wasn't that good at writing fiction, because this is the 1 fanfiction that I wrote that is somewhat DECENT.

Secoundly, I really want to discover my own writing style, not steal it or reference it from someone else.

Last but not least, please don't put 'do yourself a favor' in front of your comment, it sounds somewhat insulting.

I'll go check though, and thank you for your comment.

Do yourself a favor. Talk to one of the experts like bellpickle before writing anymore fanfiction.

@SaxGirl:

Maybe I will make another one, maybe not. I'm pretty stuck on my Gaara idea, though. . .

Thanks for the comment!

@KoInu kyan:

The bird was destined to be black and brown, after all, it is Neji Hyuuga we're implying, not Ijo Hyuuga (even though I totally stole the idea from that roleplay where Ijo was dead. . . . .the one that Nejiko was in~)

And don't cry.. . . .even though I know it is the most emo-ist-ist-ist Neji story ever. . . . .AGH! Who am I kidding. My own story brings me to tears!

Yay for a (lucky) publish!

aw this was great... please do the others as well!!

~SG

Nyaaa!! Squeechan, Squeechan, Rishi thinks that it got published!!! Whaaa!!! Rishi's going to cry now!! You should have made the bird red, though...Rishi likes red. So does Ijo. (XD)

Seriously, Rishi loved it!!! Yay!!!