Otakuite | Posted 01/29/13 | Reply
Hey, sorry it took me so long! I didn't know you posted a comment and I hardly check.
Anyway, thanks for your advice. I intended this comic to be a short one, with only 30 or so pages. It's mostly a practice comic since I have never really done a full one before. I am aware how awful the first pages are. In fact, I think I drew them back in 2009. I wanted the first three pages to be an introduction to Anna mostly, and not just the demon fight.
Maybe in the future I might try to redo this comic ( I love drawing Amanda and Anna's reactions to each other) but right now, I'm not even sure I'm gonna continue with it. I am in college now and I don't really have much time for it.
Thanks for reading Possessed. And I'm not terribly mad. I think it's good to take the criticism I receive and use it to make it better.
Otakuite+ | Posted 11/18/12 | Reply
I really hate to sound cruel, but I think the previous pages need a bit of work. There's no variety in speech bubbles, which are necessary for expressing emotions, and very few changes in pose or panels. I'll start with the first page.This kind of scene is one I would imagine at night, which you can create using the tools in PAINT.net or photoshop. You can easily expand the exorcism to at least ten pages to add more tension with simple things like your character chasing the demon down to an abandoned place or another where you see something like dead bodies and that to further express how evil it is. I personally think the panel for her chanting the exorcism need to be long vertically with a dark background and the area around her glowing (you can do this by using Gaussian blur on PAINT.net and so forth) to add to the eerie atmosphere. One thing professional manga artists do to add the pain in someone's voice is scribbly speech boxes which are also used to express anger. If you have this speech box while showing the demon being destroyed, it'll only add to the atmosphere.
I really think this story has potential, it's really all down to how you storyboard the whole thing. I know I sound nasty and you probably don't want to hear from me again (lord knows I wouldn't) I am here to give out advice and I have no intentions of insulting or bad-mouthing your work. I merely want it to reach its full potential... don't eat me.