You know, I didn't realize this was a comic until I scrolled down....
heh |D
Anyway~ I really love the cover and the character design got a lot better.
I like it so far, but one thing I recommend is keeping the shading consistent, especially since this is a very melancholic flashback-memory. This page is sad, and although the characters express this with their facial expression the lack of shading takes away from what you are trying to communicate in this page. More shading in this page would help communicate the feelings of forlorn or sadness to the reader and along the way help move the story along.
Can't wait to see more!
Last edited by ChocoBits at 8:37:59 PM CDT on June 19, 2010.
Missa8305
Senior Otaku | Posted 12/27/11 | Reply
Very interesting... Write & draw more please!
ChocoBits
Grand Otaku | Posted 08/08/10 | Reply
:D
I'm curious. So my face will be stuck like this in anticipation until the next update :D
This guy looks like a real meanie D:<
Xue needs a hug... C:
Also, you're good at drawing animals! You are improving really fast!
Keep it up :D
-Choco
DixieWings
Daydreamer (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 07/25/10 | Reply
@TheDarkAngel:
Thank you! I'm so glad you think so and enjoy it >w<
LOL. I didn't do that intentionally but wish i had! xDDD
TheDarkAngel
Pathetic Diabetic (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 07/25/10 | Reply
Nice plot line started. I can tell your skills are flourishing! You're really improving and I'm happy to say I enjoy it~!
Lol... Rafiel... so close to "Raffle" lol... Raffle Ticket...
was that intentional? ;:3
And, then... I met you.
MaraBruckner
Otakuite++ | Posted 07/17/10 | Reply
This is an interesting manga I would like to read more.
kilalalover
Sheep Eternal (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 07/04/10 | Reply
Looks great so far. I wanna know more about what's going on so continue plz! >w<
ChocoBits
Grand Otaku | Posted 07/03/10 | Reply
I love Xue's expressions through out this whole page. It hints at his personality. :D
FFNaru134
Otakuite++ | Posted 07/02/10 | Reply
Ice fishing! :D
TamaDoodles24
Otaku Legend | Posted 06/24/10 | Reply
This looks good! I'll definately be keeping up with this! Can't wait for more..
MissGoldenAngel
Secretly a Turnip (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 06/21/10 | Reply
This looks like a cool manga so far! Poor Xue needs a hug. ;-;
I can't wait for more! :D
DixieWings
Daydreamer (Otaku Eternal) | Posted 06/19/10 | Reply
@ChocoBits:
Thank you so much for the critic choco! <3
I'll try to keep the tones and shading more consistent C:
ChocoBits
Grand Otaku | Posted 06/19/10 | Reply
You know, I didn't realize this was a comic until I scrolled down....
heh |D
Anyway~ I really love the cover and the character design got a lot better.
I like it so far, but one thing I recommend is keeping the shading consistent, especially since this is a very melancholic flashback-memory. This page is sad, and although the characters express this with their facial expression the lack of shading takes away from what you are trying to communicate in this page. More shading in this page would help communicate the feelings of forlorn or sadness to the reader and along the way help move the story along.
Can't wait to see more!
Last edited by ChocoBits at 8:37:59 PM CDT on June 19, 2010.
FFNaru134
Otakuite++ | Posted 06/19/10 | Reply
Don't cry Xue! Don't cry! *hugs*