I got some help from Luna Lei on those japanese words. I didn`t know that Jin was a boy name, but it was such a nice name one her. And the name of the technique is supposed to mean "Eye of death". Well, I`m just a beginner. Thanks for the comment!!
For being 13 and claiming to be not very good with English, I'd say you have a spark of raw talent that just needs practice, so keep writing. The only things I'm lost on is: the technique: it translates to "it is of eye" - perhaps this is something significant to be revealed later? Okami just means "wolf", so I'm assuming its a wolf demon? And lastly, is her name pronounced "Jen" or "Gene"...if you were going for a Japanese name, "Jin" is pronounced "Gene" and its a boy's name. But its cool that girls have boy's names!
To be honest with you, I've seen a lot worse.I think if you keep working at it, you could be really, really good.
And I'm not trying to be mean, so don't take anything the wrong way.
Tatsumafangirl411
Title: Otakuite++ | Posted 10/08/08 | Reply
Yay! U updated! Awesome
job! I LUV the story so
far!
Keep updating!
TheAngelRaine
Title: Senior Otaku | Posted 10/07/08 | Reply
Why must you make me read so much!DX
Its really cute so far.^^
Rai-chan
arabians101
Title: Senior Otaku | Posted 10/04/08 | Reply
^^ this looks good so far ! you have to update it sooner or later!
-Mustang
Last edited by arabians101 at 10:23:07 AM EDT on October 4, 2008.
darKatana
Title: Senior Otaku | Posted 07/31/08 | Reply
@Kami-chan.x3:
*hug back* Thank you!
darKatana
Title: Senior Otaku | Posted 07/31/08 | Reply
@Hatake Yoshimi:
I got some help from Luna Lei on those japanese words. I didn`t know that Jin was a boy name, but it was such a nice name one her. And the name of the technique is supposed to mean "Eye of death". Well, I`m just a beginner.
Thanks for the comment!!
Hatake Yoshimi
Title: Otakuite | Posted 07/31/08 | Reply
For being 13 and claiming to be not very good with English, I'd say you have a spark of raw talent that just needs practice, so keep writing. The only things I'm lost on is: the technique: it translates to "it is of eye" - perhaps this is something significant to be revealed later? Okami just means "wolf", so I'm assuming its a wolf demon? And lastly, is her name pronounced "Jen" or "Gene"...if you were going for a Japanese name, "Jin" is pronounced "Gene" and its a boy's name. But its cool that girls have boy's names!
To be honest with you, I've seen a lot worse.I think if you keep working at it, you could be really, really good.
And I'm not trying to be mean, so don't take anything the wrong way.
Kami-chan.x3
Title: Senior Otaku | Posted 07/30/08 | Reply
ITS COOL! I love this new cover. It's not lame, believe me. *huggles*
Tatsumafangirl411
Title: Otakuite++ | Posted 07/30/08 | Reply
It so awesome so far!! Great work
!!!!!
arabians101
Title: Senior Otaku | Posted 06/23/08 | Reply
I can't wait to see how you draw ^^
kimokumori113
Title: Otakuite+ | Posted 05/27/08 | Reply